Wednesday 26 October 2011

Could you check my language mistakes?

%26quot;Detailed product information

The internet provides much more details then other sources. It can provide details of: price, colour choices, description of features and specifications, technical advice, promotion deals. You are also able to see high quality pictures of the products which you can rotate, zoom in and out. In additional, they can now use images, sound and video to present their products.

The Internet can provide information about the business to other businesses and potential investors. Websites can also be used to explain the target market of particular business, which sector it operates in and its product range, futures planes etc.



Customer services

Most of online stores provide very good customer service. The main advantage of it is that:

? Website are available 24 hours a day, seven days a week

? FAQ (Frequently ask questions) provides impediment help

? Online complaint forms

? Various options for customers like contact forms etc.

These all help to give online customers a better level of service and allow to make requests or comments at any time!



Online stores are available 24/7

The business can be open 24 hours a day and seven days a week. This allows it to take orders, make appointments, take customers queries and make sales. Online websites never close so this means customers can visit the shop at any time and purchase goods.

It makes communication with customers, suppliers and other businesses more efficient and effective and gives ability to provide quick information and reliable advice before and after sales



The Internet is always up-to-date

Catalogues quickly go out of date. The internet can be updated immediately giving customers choice of the latest products and promotions. It also informs potential customers about stock availability, delivery charges etc.





Product reviews

There are many independent websites which offer product reviews directly from customers who have already purchased the item. The main advantage of it is that potential customers are able to read independence opinions before purchase.



Advice

In the Internet there is a lot of websites which offer useful advice and information to potential customers e.g. wikipedia, chat rooms and forums where people are discussing certain topics and share their knowledge and expedience.



Comparing

In the internet there is a lot of discusses groups and chats. Potential customers are able to compare and talk about particular product and talk about it before purchases. Customers can see and compare the prices between businesses very easily. It gives customers much greater power of the internet.



Dynamic pricing

It is the dynamic adjustment of prices according to market conditions and customers dement. This means that customers can benefit form prices because it is always up-date and it changes. The airline industry and hotels are two examples where customers can save due to dynamic pricing. For example, when a few hotel rooms are booked the, availability is very good and prices are quite cheap. When fewer rooms are available the prices increase.



Responsive transactions



The Internet gives the chance to conduct immediate transactions and immediately have the satisfaction of knowing that you bought something online. The grate example of it is ebay where people can bid in real time on auctions. It gives the satisfaction of knowing that we the won auction and bought something online.%26quot;




Could you check my language mistakes?
~Yes, I could. In fact, I did. Your first one was in simply inquiring as to my ability rather than to ask for my help or a critique of the prose.



Language is a precise tool. Learn to use it precisely.





If MJ truly is a teacher, which I doubt, and teaches any subject that requires application of the rules of grammar, one can only hope she has not been granted tenure and her writing ability is reviewed and is part of the criteria upon which continued employment will rely. If my children attended a school in which she was employed, and if my complaints to the school board and administration went unheeded, I would withdraw them and enroll them in private schools or I would home teach them. Someone save us from such incompetence. I'll leave the ethical issues out of it for now.

On the other hand, if MJ was trying as hard as I was to help you with your homework (by doing it for you), then MJ, I apologize - but the commentary on your prose stands. I don't understand why you did the cut and paste, however.
Could you check my language mistakes?
the internet provides many more details

in addition they can now use images

future plans

on the internet there are a lot of websites

knowledge and experience

on the internet there are a lot of disscusion groups

about a particular product

the great example of it



u will have to read throught to find the mistakes too long to number the lines
Use Microsoft Word.



They have Spell Checker.



hope this helps
Below is the altered text, and in the sources, I have a screenshot of it with all the things I changed bolded.



Detailed product information:

The internet provides many more details then other sources. It can provide details of: price, colour choices, description of features and specifications, technical advice, promotion deals. You are also able to see high quality pictures of the products which you can rotate and zoom in and out. In addition, they can now use images, sound and video to present their products.

The Internet can provide information about the business to other businesses and potential investors. Websites can also be used to explain the target market of particular business, which sector it operates in and its product range and futures planes etc.



Customer services:

Most of online stores provide very good customer service. The main advantage of it is that:

? Websites are available 24 hours a day, seven days a week

? FAQ (Frequently ask questions) provides unhindered help

? Online complaint forms

? Various options for customers like contact forms etc.

These all help to give online customers a better level of service and allow you to make requests or comments at any time!



Online stores are available 24/7.

The business can be open 24 hours a day and seven days a week. This allows it to take orders, make appointments, take customer queries and make sales. Online websites never close, so this means customers can visit the shop at any time and purchase goods.

It makes communication with customers, suppliers and other businesses more efficient and effective and gives the ability to provide quick information and reliable advice before and after sales.



The Internet is always up-to-date.

Catalogues quickly go out of date. The internet can be updated immediately giving customers a choice of the latest products and promotions. It also informs potential customers about stock availability, delivery charges etc.



Product reviews:

There are many independent websites which offer product reviews directly from customers who have already purchased the item. The main advantage of it is that potential customers are able to read independent opinions before purchase.



Advice:

On the Internet, there are a lot of websites which offer useful advice and information to potential customers e.g. Wikipedia, chat rooms and forums where people are discussing certain topics and share their knowledge and expedience.



Comparing:

On the internet, there are a lot of discussion groups and chats. Potential customers are able to compare and talk about a particular product and talk about it before purchasing. Customers can see and compare the prices between businesses very easily. It gives customers much more power.



Dynamic pricing:

It is the dynamic adjustment of prices according to market conditions and customers demount. This means that customers can benefit from prices because it is always up-date and it changes. The airline industry and hotels are two examples where customers can save due to dynamic pricing. For example, when a few hotel rooms are booked, the availability is very good and prices are quite cheap, when fewer rooms are available the prices increase.



Responsive transactions:

The internet offers the chance to conduct immediate transactions and immediately have the satisfaction of knowing that you bought something online. One great example of this is eBay, where people can bid in real time on auctions. It gives the satisfaction of knowing that you the won auction and bought something online.


Your main issues in this piece are poor word choice and grammar, lack of subject/verb agreement, too many repetitive phrases, lack of consistency, and poor sentence structure. I've made some adjustments, based on my editing experience:

%26quot;Detailed product information

The Internet provides far more detailed product information than other sources. It can provide details of price, colour choices, features, and specifications, and can offer technical advice, and promotional deals. Customers can also view high quality pictures of the products, which can be rotated or zoomed in and out. In addition, vendors can use images, sound, and video to present their products.

The Internet can also provide information about the business to other businesses and potential investors. Websites can also be used to present additional business information, including target market, operating sector, product range, and future plans to investors and other interested parties.



Customer services

Most online stores provide very good customer service and typically offer the following options to give online customers a higher level of service than traditional businesses:

? Websites are available 24 hours a day, seven days a week

? Help or Frequently Asked Questions documents (FAQs) provide information to help to address problems or questions

? Online complaint forms and problem resolution help defuse customer problems

? Contact and comment forms allow instant feedback



Online stores are available 24/7

Online businesses can be open 24 hours a day and seven days a week. This allows businesses to take orders, make appointments, answer customer queries, and make sales without time restrictions. Because online websites never close, customers can visit at any time to purchase products.

Round-the-clock availability makes communication with customers, suppliers, and other businesses more efficient and effective and allows businesses to provide quick information and reliable advice before and after sales



The Internet is always up-to-date

Printed catalogues quickly go out of date. The internet can be updated immediately, giving customers access to the latest products and promotions. It can also inform potential customers about sale-related information such as stock availability and delivery charges.



Product reviews

Many independent websites offer product reviews by customers who have already purchased a specific item. The main advantage of these websites is that potential customers can read unbiased opinions before purchasing an item.



Advice

Many websites offer useful advice and information to potential customers. Websites such as Wikipedia, chat rooms, and forums allow people to discuss and share their knowledge and experience.



Comparison

The Internet provides many options to allow potential customers to easily compare products and prices before making a purchase, giving them much greater purchasing power.



Dynamic pricing

Online businesses can adjust prices dynamically, according to market conditions and customer demand. The airline industry and hotels are two industries in which dynamic pricing can help customers to save money. For example, when few hotel rooms are booked in a particular period, the higher availability drives prices down. This can trigger increased customer interest due to lower prices. When fewer rooms are available the prices increase.



Responsive transactions

The Internet gives customers the ability to conduct immediate transactions and provides them with instant satisfaction when purchasing an item online. For example, on eBay, customers bid on auctioned items in real-time and have the satisfaction of feeling that they “won” the auction when they buy something online.%26quot;
%26quot;Detailed product information

The internet provides much more detail then other sources. It can provide details of: price, colour, choice, description of features and specifications, technical advice and promotional deals. You are also able to see high quality pictures of the products which you can rotate as well as zoom in and out of. In addition, companies can now use images, sound and video to present their products.

The Internet can provide information about the company to other businesses and potential investors. Websites can also be used to explain the target market of a particular business; which sector it operates in, and its product range, futures planes etc.



Customer Services

Most online stores provide very good customer service. The main advantages of this are:

? Websites are available 24 hours a day, seven days a week

? The FAQ (Frequently ask questions) section provides support

? Online complaint forms

? Various options for customers like contact forms etc.

These all help to give online customers a better level of service and allow requests or comments to be made at any time!



Online stores are available 24/7

The business can be open 24 hours a day and seven days a week. This allows it to take orders, make appointments, take customers' queries and make sales. Online websites never close so this means customers can visit the shop at any time and purchase goods.

It enhances communication with customers, suppliers and other businesses by being more efficient and effective, and gives ability to provide quick information and reliable advice before and after sales.



The Internet is always up-to-date

Catalogues quickly go out of date. The internet can be updated immediately giving customers choice of the latest products and promotions. It also informs potential customers about stock availability, delivery charges etc.





Product reviews

There are many independent websites which offer product reviews directly from customers who have already purchased the item. The main advantage of it is that potential customers are able to read peoples' opinions before purchase which in turn enable them to make more informed decisions about purchases.



Advice

On the Internet there are a lot of websites which offer useful advice and information to potential customers e.g. wikipedia, chat rooms and forums where people discuss certain topics and share their knowledge and expedience.



Comparing

On the internet there are a lot of discussion groups and chat rooms. Potential customers are able to compare and talk about specific products prior to purchase. Customers can easily compare and contrast the prices between potential vendors. This gives the customers greater buyer power.



Dynamic pricing

It is the dynamic adjustment of prices according to market conditions and customers demand. This means that customers can benefit from prices because they are kept up to date with changes. The airline industry and hotels are two examples where customers can save due to dynamic pricing. For example, when few hotel rooms have been booked the availability is in turn very good and prices can be relatively cheap. However, when fewer rooms are available, prices may well increase.



Responsive transactions



The Internet gives the chance to conduct immediate transactions thus providing instant customer satisfaction.One good example of it is ebay where people can bid in real time on auctions. It gives customers the satisfaction of knowing that they have won the auction and bought something online.%26quot;

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