Advancements in communication, office technology and the Internet have become necessary tools that have revolutionized the vast world of commerce.
Is this a decent thesis and what is the term for blackberries, laptops and computers?
You need to narrow it down a bit. The word %26quot;vast%26quot; makes your thesis seem endless. Try something shorter like %26quot;Advancements in business technology have become vital to the success of the commerce industry.%26quot;
